UE 1998 Section C Proofreading (Q77- 95)
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No. |
Ill formed Sentences |
Correction |
Analysis |
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77. |
From 9:30 to 11:00 at SaturdayˇK |
From 9:30 to 11:00 on SaturdayˇK |
The preposition, ˇ§onˇ¨ is used in front of day and date. Day: on Sunday Date: on Nov. 9th But the preposition, ˇ§atˇ¨ is used in front of an exact time. e.g. We met at 1:00 p.m. |
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78. |
Fun Club members invited to come along to the ParkˇK |
Fun Club members are invited to come along to the ParkˇK |
Here, passive voice is used because the fun club members have received the invitation and go to the Ocean Park. Passive Voice: verb to be + past participle are invited |
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79. |
ˇKto gain a best understanding of sharksˇK |
ˇKto gain a better understanding of sharksˇK |
Here, ˇ§bestˇ¨, the superlative form should not be used. Instead, ˇ§betterˇ¨ should be used in order to compare the membersˇ¦ understanding of sharks before and after attending the workshops. |
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80. |
ˇK a better understanding of sharkˇK |
ˇK a better understanding of sharks |
Since
there are many sharks in the Park, ˇ§sharksˇ¨ should be in plural form. |
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81. |
Workshops, exhibits and tours that will explain the biology of sharksˇK |
Workshops, exhibits and tours will explain the biology of sharksˇK |
ˇ§thatˇ¨
should be deleted. The
structure of this sentence: Subject
+
verb
+ object Workshops,
exhibits will
explain the
biology and
tours
of sharks |
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84. |
the enclose application formˇK |
the enclosed application formˇK |
The
verb, ˇ§encloseˇ¨ should be replaced by the past participle which is
acted as an adjective, ˇ§enclosedˇ¨.
ˇ§enclosedˇ¨ is used to modify the noun phrase, ˇ§application
formˇ¨ |
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85. |
Fun Club members which are fond of gardening will have a special treatˇK |
Fun Club members who are fond of gardening will have a special treatˇK |
The
relative pronoun, ˇ§whichˇ¨ should be replaced by ˇ§whoˇ¨ because the
relative clause which is used to give additional information about people
begins with ˇ§whoˇ¨. |
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86. |
Fun Club members who are fond of gardening will have a special treat come on August 10thˇK |
Fun Club members who are fond of gardening will have a special treat coming on August 10thˇK |
ˇ§comeˇ¨
should be changed into ˇ§comingˇ¨ to form a present participle ,act as
an adjective. ˇ§coming on
August 10thˇ¨ is an adjective phrase used to modify the noun
phrase ˇ§a special treatˇ¨. Subject
+ Verb
+
Object Fun
Club members will
have
a special treat who
are fond
coming on of
gardening
August 10th |
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87. |
ˇK with two special workshop sessions in 9.00 and 11.00ˇK |
ˇK with two special workshop sessions at/ between 9.00 and 11.00ˇK |
ˇ§inˇ¨
should be replaced by ˇ§atˇ¨ or ˇ§betweenˇ¨. a)
ˇ§at 9.00 and 11.00ˇ¨ means that one session is at 9.00 and
another one is at 11.00.. b)
ˇ§between 9.00 and 11.00ˇ¨ means that the exact time is not
mentioned. What we know is
that two sessions will be held in the 2- hour period, between 9.00 and
11.00. |
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88. |
Ocean Parkˇ¦s gardening team will offer it special growing tipsˇK |
Ocean Parkˇ¦s gardening team will offer them special growing tipsˇK |
ˇ§itˇ¨
should be replaced by the object pronoun, ˇ§themˇ¨. ˇ§themˇ¨ is used to refer to the Fun Club members. |
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89. |
All child under 12 must be accompanied by an adultˇK |
All children under 12 should be accompanied by an adultˇK |
The
determiner, ˇ§Allˇ¨ should be followed by a plural noun, ˇ§childrenˇ¨
because ˇ§allˇ¨ indicates that the number of children is more than one. |
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90. |
ˇK either of this programmesˇK |
ˇK either of these programmesˇK |
ˇ§thisˇ¨
should be changed to ˇ§theseˇ¨ because the noun, ˇ§programmesˇ¨ is in
plural form. The plural form of the determine, ˇ§thisˇ¨ is ˇ§theseˇ¨. |
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91. |
Entry fees for adults and children are sameˇK |
Entry fees for adults and children are the sameˇK |
ˇ§the
sameˇ¨ is a usage . |
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92. |
ˇKwill be admitted freely of chargeˇK |
ˇKwill be admitted free of chargeˇK |
ˇ§freeˇ¨
is an adjective . |
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93. |
Participants must fill out separate application forms by each programme. |
Participants must fill out separate application forms for each programme. |
ˇ§byˇ¨
should be replaced by ˇ§forˇ¨ The preposition, ˇ§byˇ¨ is used to
indicate the agent or means of doing sth. But the preposition ˇ§forˇ¨
means ˇ§for the purpose of (sth)ˇ¨ |
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94. |
If the number of entries do exceeds the maximumˇK |
If the number of entries do exceed the maximumˇK |
ˇ§doˇ¨
is an auxiliary verb used to emphasize that a verb is positive.
ˇ§exceedˇ¨ is in its base form after ˇ§doˇ¨. |
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95. |
ˇKparticipants will selected by lucky draw. |
ˇKparticipants will be selected by lucky draw. |
Passive
voice should be used here. Passive
voice: correct form of be + past participle
will be
selected |